| Student | Project | Title, Abstract | Subtitles for sections | Introduction and Background | Discussion of project details |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| D. Friedheim | Implementation of Steganographic Techniques | More specific title - "Steganographic Techniques for ..." or "...Applied to..." Update the abstract for final version. "It should be able...". At this point it's done. | okay | okay, any last minute cleaning up, updating for final version? | Need to update for the final version. Clarify, summarize what you've done this year. Testing and analysis you've done. |
| S. Fuqua, A. Street, B. Trzcinski | Network-based Modular Communications Protocol | Okay - any last minute updating for final version? | Better words than "Individual Assignments"? "Group Tasks"?, some software development term? | Any background on other similar products? | Any text about specifics on software development you've done for this year? |
| K. Liu | Image Filter Techniques | Does the title need updating? Does the abstract need updating for this final version? | okay. Instead of "larger purpose", is there a better heading - "Applications"? | Intro and Background - do you need the first 2 sentences? - "Digital image processing..." and "As computers..." "Inevitable" - a word that needs justification, use something like "often occurs"? | This section on what you've actually done probably needs to be updated for this final version. |
| T. Morgan | Algorithm Efficiency and Data Structure Design | Add the word "Tree" to title? "...Tree Data Structure"? Increase font size of your name? Abstract okay, need any updating for this final version? | okay | Background okay | Your own work can be expanded upon - specifically covering all you've done this year. |
| S. Oetjen | Graphical Display of Physics Simulation | Should title be plural? "Physics Simulations"? Abstract - 2nd paragraph you're using the word "graphically" or "graphical" a lot. Can one or more be taken out? | okay | Background - "The concepts of this project involve..."? "Only to name a few" do you need this? are these all of the variables? "...may attract the interest of students needing..." (rewording?) | Does this section on your own work need updating? Does give a good picture of all the work you've done? |
| J. Sherwood | Modeling of Economics | Title's ok, is this the final version of the title you're okay with? Increase the font size of your name, add Computer Systems Lab TJHSST 2006-07- Abstract - avoid hyperboles - "immensely complex system", "millions of interactions" statements that need verification and references. "...decrees...". Take out "etc", keep specifics. Your last sentence is better than the first part. | Subtitles are ok | No background, any background information you want to give on the poster? | Methodology - 3rd sentence, space before the period. This section is good - any other final edits or additions for the final version? |
| E. Silbermann | Computer Language Design and Domain Specific Languages | Check that the title is what you want for this last version. Abstract is good, any final additions needed? | Subtitles are okay | Background on metaprogramming is good. re-read for final edits or additions | More specific examples of how you've incorporated these concepts of metaprogramming? How you've been testing how well your metaprogramming is working. What other areas can you talk about testing and analysis? |
| A. Street | Network-based Modular Communications Protocol | See S. Fuqua above | --- | --- | --- |
| M. Tao | Decentralized Process Destribution | Title and Your name need to be larger font. The title should be larger font than the subtitles. Abstract - watch out for hyperboles - "enormous amount of data..." statements that need justification or references. In the 2nd paragraph, is "medium" the correct word? maybe "topology"? | Bold font for the subtitles, make them stand out a little more? | The Introduction - first sentence doesn't have a period? Do you need the first sentence? is it true? | Procedures - "independently" is spelled wrong. "Client be called.." this isn't a sentence? Clean up the grammar in this section. |
| B. Trzcinski | Network-based Modular Communications Protocol | See S. Fuqua above | --- | --- | --- |
| S. Ulery | French/English Translation | Make a version 2 poster? - Something like "French/English Translation in an Introduction to Computational Linguistics"? This Abstract is good, expand for some 2nd semester material? | Subtitles are good. | Introduction - some of this writing can probably be tightened up - Sentences like - "This project can change in size as needed throughout the year" - do you need this? Purpose section reads well | Procedures and Methodology reads well. Background section - some of this writing can be tightened up - phrases like "I read..." not sure you need. You can just reference this text directly. "also read..." robably can take out. |
| Student | Project | Visuals, charts, graphs | Analysis, results, conclusions | Digital copy? | Print from plotter? |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| D. Friedheim | Implementation of Steganographic Techniques | Eliminate the solid black background of the screenshot? (expensive ink) Diagram of a WAV packet? other ideas | Final updating needed? Any last minute clarification of larger purpose and applications? | --- | --- |
| S. Fuqua, A. Street, B. Trzcinski | Network-based Modular Communications Protocol | does the picture need to be so large? smaller would allow a little more text about the development work you've done this year | larger purpose, applications possibilities? | --- | --- |
| K. Liu | Image Filter Techniques | Any updating to the visuals? A diagram of pixel values showing the effect of filtering, before and after? | larger purpose section isn't saying much, maybe take out this section, is it necessary in this final version. Trying to minimize "filler" words. | --- | --- |
| T. Morgan | Algorithm Efficiency and Data Structure Design | What is the tree showing? clear this up? Use psuedo code rather than pasting in actual code? | Further application possibilities? Probably need to update your results for this final version | --- | --- | S. Oetjen | Graphical Display of Physics Simulation | Screenshot is good, any others needed? Any chart(s) of all the testing you've done? | Any final updating needed? | --- | --- |
| J. Sherwood | Modeling of Economics | Better to use pseudocode rather than straight code paste. Makes for more readable version of your algorithms. Any other diagram, structural, something visually portraying your process? | Results and findings probably need updating for this final version. | --- | --- |
| E. Silbermann | Computer Language Design and Domain Specific Languages | I don't like the big smiley face, maybe just the words "User.." More pseudo code examples? (rather than pasting in straight code?) | Ease of use section is good. How about other results you can write about? | --- | --- |
| A. Street | Network-based Modular Communications Protocol | See S. Fuqua above | --- | --- | --- |
| M. Tao | Decentralized Process Destribution | Can you include any real diagrams specifically relating to your project, not just a generic diagram of a network? | Results - think of how to expand on results of the work you've done this year on distributed computing. | --- | --- |
| B. Trzcinski | Network-based Modular Communications Protocol | See S. Fuqua above | --- | --- | --- |
| S. Ulery | French/English Translation | Screen shots are good, any other diagram(s) for the final version? | Expected Results - any need for updating for the final version? | --- | --- |
| Student | Project | Title, Abstract | Subtitles for sections | Introduction and Background | Discussion of project details |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| H. Beddo | Applications of Genetic Algorithms | Make a version that is 18" wide by 24" high. The title needs to be updated - “Locate Highest Elevation” | Okay | These sections need updating for your newer version of the project. | Needs updating for the completed project, wider scope than just the elevation problem |
| T. Hunter-Kilmer | Investigations of Cellular Automata | Okay. Your name can be larger font - hopefully this will fit. | okay | okay | okay - any final updating needed for this last version? |
| A. Katkova | TJ Hall Modeling | Title ok? short an succinct. The abstract's column width seems less than the other paragraphs? provide (MultAgent...) for MASON acronym? | okay | Background - misspelling - "them" should be "then". Hyperbole - "great deal of research..." maybe take out? The traffic jam example? move to the paper? this would allow more space to talk about your specific project? | Do you need the part about working through the MASON tutorial? Maybe start with just "I adapted the MASON tutorial" - do you remember the specific one, good to reference specifically. Any updating needed for this final version? | T. McNeill | Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design | Okay, increase font size for your name? First sentence of the abstract needs justification or reword. Reword "no longer acceptable" in next sentence? Maybe just start with 3rd sentence. Reword last sentence of abstract to update for current version? | Okay. "Larger purpose" can be "Application Areas" or something like that? | Not much background or introduction | Nothing on the specific development you did for this project this year. Fix this. | P. Mutchler | Music Editing/Composition Software | Is the title clear as to what "Compositional" means? "Music Composition Software Development"? First sentence of the abstract needs justification - maybe take out this sentence. Or reword to "...can be expensive and complicated to use for teaching." | okay | "Lilypond...does not relate at all" maybe reword - "this project is not intending to..." or take this sentence out? The last paragraph of the Background, I'm not sure this is true - maybe take out this paragraph? | Good start on covering the work you've done this year. This probably needs updating for this final version? |
| O. Ponomarenko | Map Navigation Using A* Search | Is this the final title version? You don't need the "Third Quarter" any more. Abstract is good, any last changes or additions for the final version? | okay | Background section may be too long. Careful about making statements that need justification - "they often disregard...", "usually commercial programs use speed limits..." Not sure you even need all this. Just simply saying they exist may be enough | "python" - P should be capitalized? "..outputs nicer, simpler graphs..." do you want this? Write more about what you've actually done this year. | L. Rumpf | Human Cognitive Emulation | no poster - need a poster for credit for the course | --- | --- | --- | E. Turner | Evolution Simulator | Your name can be larger font. Also add something like "Computer Systems Lab TJHSST 2006-07". Probably should avoid the non-specific phrase like "...and so on", leave off or list an item specifically. Is "dozens" still true? List a few - "...such as..." Need a period after "offspring" | Need a subtitle for the second section in the lefthand column? | The first sentence in the second section on the left - "...are directly effected..." should be "affected..."? "Genes have an equal change..." should be "equal chance"? What's mutating up or down? | Want to comment about achieving an equilibrium state, how achievable this is? |
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| Student | Project | Visuals, charts, graphs | Analysis, results, conclusions | Digital copy? | Print from plotter? |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| H. Beddo | Applications of Genetic Algorithms | Try to use your own figures, diagrams, charts. If you use someone else's chart - you must give credit. I don't think these diagrams are your own. | Needs to be updated. Larger purpose, applications? | --- | --- |
| T. Hunter-Kilmer | Investigations of Cellular Automata | okay, any final updating needed? Can you make the background light rather than dark on the graph? (expensive ink) | okay, any final updating needed? | --- | --- |
| A. Katkova | TJ Hall Modeling | okay, any final updates - graphs you've been working on? Explain each graph. | Any final updating? Wider application, use, purpose, might be good to mention. | --- | --- | T. McNeill | Modular Architecture for Computer Game Design | No Cheney screenshots please, keep this generic. Does the screenshot need to be this large? | Nothing yet on conclusions. Here is where you can say something about further applications | --- | --- | P. Mutchler | Music Editing/Composition Software | Visuals look good, any last updating needed? | Expected outcomes - last sentence is not a complete sentence. The part about testing with other students - was this done? | --- | --- |
| O. Ponomarenko | Map Navigation Using A* Search | The graph network you have isn't so good. Use a screenshot of your actual program? What else - a little bit of the txt map file? | A brief mention of possible applications, motivations for this project? | --- | --- | L. Rumpf | Human Cognitive Emulation | no poster - need a poster for credit for the course | --- | --- | --- | E. Turner | Evolution Simulator | Screenshots are good, will they show up better in color hopefully? The details are lost in the black white print. | Good shot of the transportation mechanism | --- | --- | --- | --- | --- | --- | --- | --- |
| Student | Project | Title, Abstract | Subtitles for sections | Introduction and Background | Discussion of project details |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| J. Chen | Applications of Neural Networks | okay, does the abstract need updating for final version? | okay | okay, Stick to work you've actually accomplished this year - did you do stock market analysis with neural nets? Okay background | Clean up this part. Clarify (with example?) the work you've actually done this year. |
| L. Jepsen | Traffic Light Simulation | Is title clear enough? "Intelligent Traffic Light..."? Simulating not only a busy traffic light, but also making the light intelligent. "...change hourly..."? another word besides "hourly" - maybe "over time" | okay | Tighten up the wording? "...can be frustrating places..." "...no one likes to...whiz by..." The first two sentences can be shortened to one? (or taken out?) Take out "etc.", use specifics. "...worked the best..." change to "...worked most efficiently"? | This needs to be updated for the analysis you've done about the timing of the light. Can you say anything about how the graph relates? |
| K. Kassing | 3D Visualization and Graphics Engine | Okay, check for any final updates | okay, maybe split up the large section. | okay, check for any final updating necessary | good, again check for final updating such as the tiling algorithm |
| L. Kearsely | Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems | "&", "AI"? should these be spelled out? Check for final updates to your abstract. | okay | okay, any final updates? | okay, any final updates, additions? |
| F. Pareja-Lecaros | Finite State Machines and Game Design | no poster - need a poster for credit for the course | --- | --- | --- |
| D. Phillips | Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions | Put your name + Computer Systems Lab 2006-07 underneath title. I like the subtitle. No Abstract - want to include a brief abstract? | okay | No background or introductory info, want to include any? | "...many auctions will be ran..." should be "run" Need to update the Progress for this final version. Nicholas Loffredo also knows about networked games in Java. |
| P. Riggs | TJ School Hallway Design | no poster - need a poster for credit for the course | --- | --- | --- |
| N. Sidawy | Applications of Machine Learning with Othello | Title ok, is this the final title version you want? Add a date - 2006-07. Abstract needs to go first, Not at the bottom of the poster. "machine learning with artificial intelligence" - is that redundant? - "machine learning in the game Othello"? Not sure you need the second sentence, it may be filler. Say something specific about your particular technique. | Subtitles okay, "Procedures" plural? | Careful of hyperboles - "extensive field of study". Do you need the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs? | Procedure section is very long, good to be detailed, but is there too much here? Go into more specific detail about how you've ended up accomplishing this machine learning. |
| R. Srigiriraju | Intranet Module: Implementation of a 4-Function Calculator | Do you want to update your title to include something about the graphics surface covering issues you've been dealing with? Do you need to update the Abstract to include these issues - garbage collection optimization surface | Subtitles are okay | If you want to write more about what you've done recently, you can consider taking out the Background section? | Maybe don't need the Staged Delivery sentence for the poster, good to keep in for the paper version. Any updates for the final version? |
| A. Wang | End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent | Title and abstract are okay, is this your final version of a title? Check if the Abstract needs any final updating, additions. | Subtitles are good. Are you still using the term "Evertorrent"? EverTorrent? | okay. Need any more background info on bittorents? | Any more specific details needed on your implementation, the data passed during handshakes? |
| B. Ward | Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing | Update the title, take out 3/30/07, add something like "Computer Systems Lab 2006-07 TJHSST" Abstract here is in the Purpose section | Subtitles are okay | Not sure you need the part about Butterfly Effect? Is that almost common knowledge? Maybe add background about message passing. | Progress section needs to be updated. This one reads as if it's still 3rd quarter. Write your final version of the work you've done. |
| R. Ward | ACO: Ant Colony Optimization | Title is good, need an Abstract section? | Subtitles are good | Background section is good - final adaptation for the single panel version poster? | Development section is good - final adaptation needed for this single panel version poster. |
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| Student | Project | Visuals, charts, graphs | Analysis, results, conclusions | Digital copy? | Print from plotter? |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| J. Chen | Applications of Neural Networks | Anything else besides just a neural net diagram? this isn't much. | clarify work results you've actually done. Larger purpose, applications? | --- | --- |
| L. Jepsen | Traffic Light Simulation | okay, except the graph needs to be explained? | okay, but needs updating for this final version. Wider purpose, application possibilities? | --- | --- |
| K. Kassing | 3D Visualization and Graphics Engine | good, lighten the background colors | any wider purpose, applications to include? | --- | --- |
| L. Kearsely | Hybrid AI and Machine Learning Systems | okay, check if these are all the final visuals you want. Can you lighten the background of the screenshot (expensive ink) | okay, any final additions, modifications, emphasis? | --- | --- |
| F. Pareja-Lecaros | Finite State Machines and Game Design | no poster - need a poster for credit for the course | --- | --- | --- |
| D. Phillips | Effect of Size and Information on Unique-Bid Auctions | Screenshots are good, the left most bullet words - do they fit, or are they off the edge? | any applications of this to mention? | --- | --- |
| P. Riggs | TJ School Hallway Design | no poster - need a poster for credit for the course | --- | --- | --- |
| N. Sidawy | Applications of Machine Learning with Othello | Diagram(s) for your process of writing the data structure to a file and genetically picking top board states? | Conclusion is very short, need to add more for this final version. | --- | --- |
| R. Srigiriraju | Intranet Module: Implementation of a 4-Function Calculator | Diagrams and chart of data is good, do you want to do any final updates? | Check that your Results are finalized and up to date. | --- | --- |
| A. Wang | End-to-end Publication Using Bittorrent | Add a snapshot of the data passed during a handshake? | Change Expected Results to Results? Update for this final version. | --- | --- |
| B. Ward | Chaos Theory Using Supercomputing | The dark background of the image needs to be lightened - expensive ink. This large fractal can be a smaller image and you can add a diagram about message passing? The fractal is sort of common nowadays? | Progress and results section needs updating for this final version. | --- | --- |
| R. Ward | ACO: Ant Colony Optimization | Images are good - any final updates for this single panel version? | Results and applications are good. Congratulations on the Science Fair 07! | --- | --- |
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